Some people don't have a good idea about eating , they skip breakfast and don't have enough time for lunch until they treat themselves a big meal on dinner after work . It is not a correct concept of diet but it has become a common situation . Eating too much greasy , salty and sweet also cause body diseases . Addition people don't doing exercise regularly and don't eating on time that why it is easy to gain a fat . Using a good way on a diet is also an important thing . Some people trust the diet pill can lose the weight . However it does work or not but it is not a good way for our health .
I had an experience about diet . I gained 10kg when I was staying in Canada . The life in Western country is boring at night . It is very common having a party and eating out every night for international students . However, the happy time was until the time when I couldn't wear any of my jeans and I realized I should go on a diet , and stop eating too much . I tried to make some light food for myself and exercised regularly . When the weight went down I became more confident and felt comfortable with my body .Until now, as I watch my photos which I was overweight . It seems to remind of me : Keep you in a good shape !
" Roma was not build in a day " 
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I can not believe that u were ever so fat. I think that u look good and healthy now, although u still look cute in that photo.
After resding this essay, I think that I should do exercise and control my diet like you to be in a good shape.
Hi Angel
Well done! Suggestions:
The punctuation marks follow immediately after the last word.
Diet is not a strange word anymore .
-->Diet is not a strange word anymore.
However, it causes many reasons when people want to diet and how it influnce our life .
-->there are many reasons why people go on a diet.
Some people don't have a good idea about eating , they skip breakfast and don't have enough time for lunch until they treat themselves a big meal on dinner after work .
-->run-on
Eating too much greasy , salty and sweet also cause body diseases .
-->sweet food...
Addition people don't doing exercise regularly and don't eating on time that why it is easy to gain a fat .
-->In addition, people...don't eat... That's why...gain weight.
Using a good way on a diet is also an important thing .
--> Go on a healthy and balanced diet is also important.
Some people trust the diet pill can lose the weight .
-->help them lose weight...
However it does work or not but it is not a good way for our health .
-->However, it is not... (why? Can you provide the reason why it is not good?)
I had an experience about diet . I gained 10kg when I was staying in Canada .
-->about going on a diet.
The life in Western country is boring at night . It is very common having a party and eating out every night for international students .
-->in western countries
-->very common for international students to have a party and...
However, the happy time was until the time when I couldn't wear any of my jeans and I realized I should go on a diet , and stop eating too much .
-->the happy time went on until I found out that... go on a diet and stop ...
Until now, as I watch my photos which I was overweight . It seems to remind of me : Keep you in a good shape !
-->Even now when I looked at my photos in which I was overweight, they remind me:...
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